She perceived what was coming
Hence, she remained dismally unmoving
His calloused hands languidly tucked wisps of her hair
While his soft lips grazed her forehead
He then uttered the words “I’m sorry”
A response written for the Trifecta Writing Challenge. This week we’re asking for exactly 33 of your own words about love gone wrong. But we’re asking that you not use any of the following words:
love
sad
tears
wept
heart
pain
The Foxy Igorota 
Well crafted, clever use of the 33 words. Poignant stuff
Ally:)
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Thank you!:)
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Worse to come I expect…
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🙂
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Hmmm The words you thought you wanted to hear…
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Or possibly the words she’s scared to hear the most.. 🙂
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Sometimes “I’m sorry” isn’t enough. I get the feeling she’ll need time to accept it.
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They say time heals, and I hope it does. 🙂 Thank your for your kind words.
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Words don’t heal wounds, but time does.Nice writing.
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Time does indeed. Thank you! 🙂
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Sometimes “I’m sorry.” is the one thing you long to here. It fixes so much, but not here. Well done.
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Thank you! 🙂
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Sounds like there’s worse coming. Another shoe to drop. Nicely done.
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Thank you for dropping by! 🙂
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So much said through what you didn’t explicitly say. Beautiful.
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Thank you!:)
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Well done! Sometimes the best revenge is indifference.
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Thank you!..camouflaging the pain with indifference, the sweetest revenge! I like that. 🙂
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🙂 Subtle and lovely!!
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Thank you! 🙂
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Love the little details–especially the contrast of his calloused hands vs. his soft lips. I read his “I’m sorry” as a break up she knew was coming but dreaded. Ouch.
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I enjoyed the images you painted here about his calloused hands and soft lips grazing her forehead. Sometimes sorry can mean so much. Depending on the person using the word. To some people those two words roll off their tongues so easy that it causes any meaning to be lost. Then for others, being able to say, “I’m sorry” is so hard that when they do say it, it means more than anyone can explain. Wonderful piece that makes me think!
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Great job with this scene. I could really feel that kiss goodbye.
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Profound. Sensing that something is coming can’t shield one from the inevitable pain and sorrow. Instead, we tense up, preparing for the worst: yet, when it arrives it pierces our hard shell, none the less.
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Oh, this is all kinds of sad.
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You did a great job of showing how she had to steel herself in preparation for this conversation. Nice.
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Such a great write. These lines are exquisite: His calloused hands languidly tucked wisps of her hair While his soft lips grazed her forehead.
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At least he seems genuine. Thanks for linking up.
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